Short Story: Your Sorrows Into Me

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Mary Hannon


He didn't imagine that every girls' fear was the reality of her past


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The more he looked at her, the more her differences showed. First he noticed how she wore boots instead of slip on shoes, then how her jeans were ripped along the front, as if a large cat had tried to tear them off her legs. Her top was black, cut stylishly, with a grey skull painted on and silver studs along the neck line. But it was her hair that fascinated him the most. It was darker than midnight in winter, with a single platnium blonde streak on the left side, just behind her fringe. Her fringe was just a simple straight fringe, but it had an intense effect if she looked at you and caught you off guard.

He walked up to where she was sitting, and sat down next to her, but not too close.

"This is an unusual place to sit and hang out." He looked around the cemetry, feeling a little freaked out. She shrugged.

"I was visiting family."…

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Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "This was harrowing in parts and the depth of pain and grief were absolutely bottomless for this poor child. To me in her innocence and her stripped back emotion she is very childlike. The dialogue was agonising as she poured out her heart. As you have probably gathered I really did like this a great deal. The only thing that I would say is that I would have omitted the very very last bit. End it with the embrace I think it is more powerful. (of course it is your story and I could be totally wrong). Super writing though - thanks - Diane"
1 year ago
Mary Hannon replied saying "Thank you! I was a little baffled at how to end the story, so I must thank you again for helping me with that. I am glad you liked the story, thank you again."
1 year ago
Adam West Guest Editor said "There is an understated quality to this that worked well given the subject matter. The dialogue felt profound. Pain of this intensity is never easy to convey without over-dramatising and yet I believe you managed this element particularly well - many thanks, Adam"
1 year ago
Mary Hannon replied saying "Thank you. When I was writting this, I guess I was reliving the grief and pain I felt when I lost a love one. I'm glad you approve of how I presented the negative emotions."
1 year ago
Jay Leffew said "Very intense. I was able to see Abby, from NCIS, sitting there so forlorn, and that made your description very alive to me. Lovely poignant piece, thank you."
1 year ago
Mary Hannon replied saying "Thank YOU for your supportive comment! I always did admire Abby and thought she had more character than some people would have thought, and I guess I drew on that admiration for her when I created the character in my head. Thank you."
1 year ago

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