Short Story: When Tommy Cut His Hair

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Desmond Kelly


A cool kid cuts his hair. Why? What for? Read his story here.


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When Tommy cut his hair, he cut it real short.

He’d had long hair since he was a kid. He’d been a cool kid for so long. It felt as if Tommy had vanished although he was still there.

His friends didn’t see Tommy for days, and then suddenly when he re-appeared, at the joint where everyone hung out, it was as if a Starship had dropped anchor, and Tommy stepped off.

Everybody stared, wanting to poke fun but Tommy was a cool kid. It wasn’t done.

“So Tommy, where you been?” Someone asked. “And what’s with the disguise?”

Tommy ran a hand across his head. It was possible to see scalp shining through.

“Something new.” He said, as if it was nothing and might have seemed that way if everyone else didn’t feel excluded from the decision Tommy had taken, independent of their advice.

“It’s nothing.” He reiterated.

Girls were looking, casting an approving/disapproving glance in his direction.…

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Jay Leffew said "Could've cried, - twice - the dry writing made this all the more poignant. I'm not sure how you brought it home to us, but it was obvious Tommy is a good kid, and cool too. Thanks for this."
12 months ago
Desmond Kelly replied saying "Wow Jay, thanks. I tried to remain downbeat throughout (cool kid style). The original ending was supposed to be the toy in the cereal bowl, but it just took flight. Des"
12 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "I loved the voice of this. It was such an emotional tangle, I really felt for Tommy, I grieved with is mum for what was coming, and I wanted to take him and give him a big hug. Thing is though at the end I actually felt a bit disappointed for him as well. Not that I wanted the ending that he had surmised would be his but it just seemed that he had a long hill to climb now and before he was going up on a rocket. Hmm this certainly churned up the emotions - well done - Diane"
12 months ago
Desmond Kelly replied saying "Thanks Diane. Yes, I took Tommy on a journey into that weird adolescent place wherein all who enter must die. It's the fatalist in me, but Tommy's a good kid and didn't deserve the ending fate held in store. Des"
12 months ago

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