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Adam West


Helping a friend in need, in mid 22nd century Britain (now a Republic), poses a problem for Victor.


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Victor sat on his bed. He looked out of his first-floor pod-flat bedroom window at the dual carriageway that was no longer a dual carriageway – not strictly speaking.

People of a certain age still called it that.

He was of that age.

Electro-ped-cycles zipped, freight trams glided, electro-buses moved little by little, final phase commercial time drawing to a close – a fizz, a drone and a hum of noise.

I’ve sat here too long, Victor said to himself; just watching it move. I ought to get up.

He got up, clawed at the stiffness in his thigh. Kneaded it a little.

When the pain in his leg intensified, he sat back down on the bed, not thinking in any sense about his physical condition, the ever-present fatigue that was its hallmark, or the muscle pain, which caused him to rub his thigh. Neither was he contemplating the fact, pain in itself, could be a constant reminder.

He rarely thought about his illness.

No, he said to…

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Steven Mace said "I found this a very compelling depiction of a future-reality, and I enjoyed the characterisation and writing."
3 weeks ago
James Tate said "As usual I read the comments before I read the story and as usual, others have said what I would have said. My fault for getting here so late in the day. I've got a lot of catching up to do with Adam West stories. With this one I found I wanted to know what happened to that Nissan and the gunshot and then at the end I almost shouted out, "Charismatic? Mass suicide? What?" As discussed elsewhere, it's good to throw the reader a curved ball from time to time and let him/her work out how to catch it. In simpler terms - I enjoyed this story."
2 months ago
Adam West replied saying "Thanks again, James for reading and your insight - I rescued Victor from my last go at a full-length manuscript, one that I had the temerity to send to an agent. The Victor series here on SB are all adapted from that writing, which in itself I found to be a valuable exercise. Of the others, Victor and the Door-To-Door Pedlars is probably the best - glad you enjoyed my slice of sci-fi/dystopia. PS - the driver of the Nissan was shot dead by the authorities, who somehow, without seeing the necessity of a face-to-face consultation deemed him to be psychotic!"
2 months ago
Duncan Malcolm said "Hi Adam, I read this after our chat about Legacy and found your techniques extremely inspiring. The way such a large scene is set so smoothly and without confusing the beautiful detail of Victors' character makes me happy. Thanks very much."
5 months ago
Adam West replied saying "Many thanks for reading and your comments, Duncan - if ever I learn that something I have written, be it a story or even a comment on another writer's story, has inspired someone, that likewise makes me feel happy. There are a number of talented writers on here, and many with the potential IMO, to go on to greater things and whatever we do to help nurture each other seems very worthwhile to me."
5 months ago
Oliver Boyne said "Victor is a character in the great tradition of alienated, dispirited, intellectually unstimulated, somewhat impoverished, always idealistic, and communicatively retarded folks who litter the prophetic semi-sci-fi I always find myself coming back to. I love his ability to express beautiful, abstract ideas unpredictably, lost in a kind of fog of miscommunication. Less hits than misses would make him seem more alienated, more hits than misses more of an undervalued prophet. A character I'm happy to see you are compelled to write as much as I am to read."
1 year ago
Adam West replied saying "Thanks Jon, I got the Victor Blues today, I was thinking what if we peak and don't realise it and emboldened by a sense of 'achievement' we delude ourselves into thinking that we can only get even better and then become either conceited or complacent? Odd, in a way that Oliver's accurate analysis sparked this train of thought - does anyone else experience mild self-loathing/self-doubt after a moment of feeling gratified. Thanks for your support, Jon, you may not know it but I have a lot of respect for you as a writer and a person and so you will forgive me if from time to time I have a little poke at you when you become too self-effacing...best wishes, Adam"
1 year ago
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Adam West replied saying "Thank you Oliver for your observations on Victor. You have distilled precisely who Victor is - communicatively retarded, but as a result, more adept at realising abstract ideas. His alienation is due in part to isolation - his internal dialogue conveys his ongoing struggle - idealism, in particular the virtues of the Common Good versus his innate humanitarian approach to life and people. Simply put, I find that when an writer displays an intimate knowledge of their character's perspective, they 'do' their best writing. This is probably as good as it will get from me...nevertheless, I will keep trying"
1 year ago
John Slater said "Not really my cup of tea, but I did enjoy exploring, Victor's thoughts. Thought the scene setting very good, so much so, that even someone not used to reading science fiction could picture it. Well done."
1 year ago
Adam West replied saying "Thanks for reading and commenting John. Genres can be confusing sometimes. I'm never sure what qualifies as sci-fi as such. Victor's tales hopefully draw parallels with present day society and some of the absurdities we take for granted, as being 'normal'."
1 year ago
Susan Donim said "I have to admit- somewhat sheepishly - to being attracted to the Victor stories, solely due to the name Adam West. A little part of me hoped that the old batman veteran had taken up short story writing during his retirement from being the caped crusader.... However I'm not disappointed in the slightest. I've really enjoyed reading all of the Victor tales. I'm sure this is not the first time this comparison has been made, but Victor strikes me as an ancestor of Winston Smith (1984)... A wonderful collection of short stories focussing on a somewhat dystopian future. I particularly enjoyed this tale and often felt there were in fact three conversations going on. What was being said out loud to Joe, and another private conversation going on with the reader. A very well constructed story which really pulled me and didn't let go until the last word. I look forward to reading more about Victor. One thing I'm dying to know - was the car real?! Sue"
1 year ago
Susan Donim replied saying "It was in a copy of an old Philip K Dick book I found in a second hand bookshop, although I can't seem to find it, and have a feeling it may have been added to my Dad's bookshelf back home! If your not fussy about actually reading it in a book and don't mind reading stories in PDF format you can download it for free from here: http://manybooks.net/titles/dickp3203232032.html My top 5 PKD novels? That's a hard one. I'm not sure if I can put them into a particular order, but I will say I particularly enjoyed Galactic Pot Healer, Ubik, Time Out of Joint, Minority Report (still can't believe Tom Cruise was cast in this- what was Spielberg thinking?!) and Cosmic Puppets, I'm sure there's many more I'm forgetting... but these are my top five off the top of my head selection! What about you? Any suggestions for books I should read? Sue"
1 year ago
Adam West replied saying "Hi Sue -I'll make it my next read when I've finished Black Betty by Walter Mosley - I am it seems in dubious company being a reader of Mosley as according to the back cover blurb, Bill Clinton is numbered amongst his fans. I see now where I went wrong as a parent, I was reading the Narnia and Potter series when I should have been reading them Orwell! I have read two of the five collections of PKD's short stories - Second Variety is not in those. Please let me know which volume it is in? And your top 5 PKD novels when you have a moment. Gallapagos is on my Amazon wish list - my son read Slaughterhouse 5 for his A level English, so he will be pleased to know another Vonnegut is on its way. Adam."
1 year ago
Susan Donim replied saying "Hi Adam, I'm most surprised that you haven't read 1984, I'd be interested in your thoughts about the book. Animal Farm terrified me as a child, (I'm not entirely sure which parent thought it would make appropriate bed time reading) years later I'm still rather frightened of pigs... As for Vonnegut I'd suggest reading Galapagos next, it's actually my favourite of his books, and if you have any interest in Darwinism, it's a good fun book to read. Have you read Second Variety by PKD? It's a short story of his I recently came across, and thought it was quite simply wonderful- full of twists and turns- if Hollywood weren't so bad at turning his stories into films I'd want Second Variety to be the next blockbuster! Also I'm glad the car was real, I thought as such! Sue"
1 year ago
Adam West replied saying "Thanks Susan for your comments and observations. Ver kind of you. The Caped Crusader is currently Mayor of Quahog in the US series Family Guy. He has of course haunted me all my life. Many is the time I have been asked my name and a wry smile passes someone's lips, or on the phone, the strains of someone humming NANANANANA Batman! can be overheard. It will come as little surprise that I am like you a fan of PKD. I recently read Slaughterhouse 5 - tips on which Vonnegutt to read next would be most appreciated. Santa got it right again this xmas and came up with 1984 and Animal Farm, which I am ashamed to say I have been meaning to read for ahem...years. The car was real BTW. Victor would rather question his own mental health that admit that another citizen is flouting the rules - Victor loves The Common Good, the problem for Victor is, he also hates loathes The Common Good."
1 year ago
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Adam West replied saying "Thanks Jon. Victor (when on song) would make an interesting dinner guest, I propose - providing that is, he didn't get at the Vodka, get all morose and crash out in your pod-flat."
1 year ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "I think that these are getting better and better. I am totally convinced by Victor's world. There is so much that feels like a natural progression from the present day and enough of "now" left to connect. I find that Victor is becoming a much more sympathetic character who had prgressed from "odd little guy" to genuine tortured soul. I do hope there is more to come. Thanks for this one anyway - Diane"
1 year ago
Adam West replied saying "Thanks Diane for your observations and sticking with Victor. You are right about the connection between now and then. I imagine a distorted mirror image, if you like, the same but not the same. Victor is not so bad, really, though I'm pretty sure I wouldn't want to spend a whole day with him!"
1 year ago

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