Short Story: Travelling Alone

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Drew Payne


Father’s Day is often a time when we return to our families, to be with our own fathers. But for some people it isn’t a comfortable journey. Here a thirty-nine year old man is travelling alone to his family’s Father’s Day.


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The train was busy but it was Father’s Day. It was full of people returning home to visit their fathers, showing their respect on this particular Sunday. I assumed they were because that was what I was doing, but it was only out of a sense of duty. I felt no love for my own father and was only returning this Sunday to avoid my mother’s constant complaining. She saw it as her right to demand that I’d turn up at her family events, and if I didn’t I would feel her wrath for days to come. I’m an adult but I still fear her verbal attacks and belittling, so it’s always easier to give in to her. Today she’d planned a big Sunday dinner for Father’s Day, God knows why.

I was bored and restless; to calm my mind I started to watch the other passengers.

Sat on the bench seat, by…

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Jane Bailey said "I liked this story and it was easy to follow but was a bit lost at the end."
5 months ago
Drew Payne replied saying "Glad you liked it. I'm afraid there's a typo in the last paragraph ("my father" should read "his father"). I was rushing to get it uploaded because there was a fault on the page and I could only upload it at the last moment. More of my writing can be found at: www.drew-payne.co.uk"
5 months ago
Richard Ardus said "Brave of you to tackle these family tensions. It reads well but like Diane I was confused at the end."
11 months ago
Jay Leffew said "Strange, I thought it was obvious that this was Rory's Grandad, and your narrator was resentful his dad hadn't learned to be strong sooner. Nice bit of observation, and written in a way which keeps you guessing 'til the end."
11 months ago
Drew Payne replied saying "I glad you like my story. I'm glad you got the narrator's resentment. I'm fascinated by jealousy, but people seem to only associate it with sexual relationships, now a days."
11 months ago
Meg Malpass said "Did I loose the plot. Was the young boys father also the narrator's father or was that just a typo "my father". Thanks for sharing this story of emotions."
11 months ago
Winifred Marzella said "Good read . Families interactions can be troublesome"
11 months ago
Winifred Marzella replied saying "NO very true to life for some people"
11 months ago
Drew Payne replied saying "Thanks. I worried I'd made the story too downbeat."
11 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "You captured some of the tension and problems of family life with this although for some reason it did read a little as if you were one removed. The points you were trying to make came across very well until the very end and then I have to be honest I am left with a sense of confusion. - Thanks for this and good luck in the competition - Diane"
11 months ago
Drew Payne replied saying "Thanks for the feedback. I found it very useful and I'll certainly be using when I came back to this story. I wrote it especially for the competition and didn't have the time I like to re-write."
11 months ago

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