Short Story: The Cloud

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Fran Strahan


Be careful what you wish for...


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The cloud was over Southern Scotland and Northern England.

It had been there for weeks,raining down on the land and

the people.

And the people said 'Go Away! We dont want you and your

rain any more!'

The cloud was sad. It called upon its friend, Wind.

'Wind, take me somewhere else. They dont want me any more.'

Wind pursed his lips and blew. There were 70mph gales in

South West Scotland and Cumbria. The cloud moved on, south

and east.

The cloud was over the Midlands and Norfolk. It stayed there

for weeks, raining down on this drought-ridden area.

But still, most of the people said 'Go Away! We dont want you

and your rain any more!'

Wind was summoned up again and he pursed his lips and blew.

The cloud headed south. There were 50mph gusts throughout

the Midlands.

The sad little cloud rained down over London, Hampshire,

Sussex and Kent. It hadn't been there too long at all

before the people yelled 'Go Away, we dont want…

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Vicky Cox said "This is a really good short story, Fran. I like how you demonstrated how much damage the wind caused because people wouldn't put up with a bit of rain and also how people forget how lucky we are to have rain in this country and not live in an impoverished and drought ridden place like Africa - where people would be as you described, grateful for a bit of rain. Truly well written. Well done. Vicky"
12 months ago
Vicky Cox replied saying "Your welcome :) Yep, we do still love a good moan :)"
12 months ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "I think you probably hit the nail on the head. People like the good message it sends 'em. Even though we still moan about the rain!! Thanks Vicky."
12 months ago
Vicky Cox replied saying "Oh really? It's great. It has a good message though, maybe that's why it has been so successful :) I'll take a look at "The Little Dogs Laughed" in a moment :D Take Care Vicky"
12 months ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you Vicky. It was the first story I submitted to Shortbread, so I was pleasantly surprised at how well its done. Its simple, so maybe thats the trick! Dunno. If you want to read a true funny story (like your first) check out my 'The Little Dogs Laughed.' Thanks ever so much again for your comments about my 'Cloud.' Best Wishes."
12 months ago
Ahmed-hamid Woody Bagala-alina said "As an African, this story touches me differently and it goes beyond mere morals. I liked its simplified complicatedness, talking about famine, drought and unfriendly rain with such a down to earth kindergarten-approach-like forwardness. And now the whole world knows that the RAIN IS IN AFRICA! Bless!"
1 year ago
Ahmed-hamid Woody Bagala-alina replied saying "Thanks, Fran..many are the people who forget Africa`s importance in the scheme of things...and it`s also rare to find people from abroad of Africa openly commending or recommending it. Thanks, girl. Bless!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Well I have a special place in my heart for Africa. Not just because of my uncle and his work, its just such a wonderful place (all its problems taken into account). After all humanity was born out of Africa! Very Best Wishes Woody and Blessings."
1 year ago
Ahmed-hamid Woody Bagala-alina replied saying "Wow...well, am way down in East Africa, Uganda to be specific. Africa is a blessed land befuddled by unblessed events...its still a great place to be born and grow up...if you survive the six killer diseases, war, famine (in some places) and AIDS! Bless!"
1 year ago
Ahmed-hamid Woody Bagala-alina replied saying "Wow...well, am way down in East Africa, Uganda to be specific. Africa is a blessed land befuddled by unblessed events...its still a great place to be born and grow up...if you survive the six killer diseases, war, famine (in some places) and AIDS! Bless!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Hi Woody. I'm pleased you like this little story, the first I had published here on SB, and I've been pleasantly surprised with how well it has been doing. I have an uncle in Africa. Hes a Cistercian monk. Only address I have on him is a PO box in Mankon, Bamenda, NW Province, Cameroon but I know the monastery is way out from that. He is in his 70's now but in the past he has designed and helped to build a church in Nigeria and performed exorcisms among other things. Catch up soon, Woody. Best Wishes."
1 year ago
Lesa Clarke said "We're never happy are we? Complaining when it does rain, complaining when it doesn't. This is a fun story and a delightful concept in the cloud and the wind as friends. But, there is a stronger message, there are those so much worse of than us and with so much more to complain about, we should be more grateful for the green and pleasant land. Really enjoyed this."
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you Lesa. Theres lots of childrens stories floating around this site. Try Linda Bond. Your two should enjoy some of her stories."
1 year ago
Lesa Clarke replied saying "As a mum to two young children, I'd day it's well pitched for them and something they could picture with ease. Good idea."
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Lesa. Its a simple little thing, written for children, just saying if the cloud did 'go away' and live in Africa - eventually we would become as Africa."
1 year ago
Andy Bottomley Guest Editor said "Ah-ha...found it!...and loved it. That really was a good little story one that tripped along merrily very much like....a cloud. Wouldn't it be good if we could push clouds around like pieces on a chess board so that they could rain where they were most needed. But then that no doubt would cause international calamity so I guess we had better let them come and go as the wind sees fit to push them, being grateful for what we get and living as I do in a remoteish part of the Yorkshire Dales we get a lot!!.....Thanks Fran and good luck with the writing...Andy"
1 year ago
Andy Bottomley Guest Editor replied saying "Lethal aren't they!!!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "There is a very large elderly population round here (myself not included!) But you'd be surprised how many 80 somethings there are whizzing around on bicycles!"
1 year ago
Andy Bottomley Guest Editor replied saying "Ah Yes, South Lincolnshire is flat the place that if I owned a bike I'd want to ride! I spent most of my time at Kelling Heath above Weybourne - and yes you're right Norfolk definately undulates, in fact i don't think I've found a flat bit yet!!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "I know the North Norfolk coast well. Hunstanton, Heacham, Wells, Blakeney, Sheringham and Cromer where the crabs come from. Oh and all the Burnhams. And the two Brancasters. But I'm in South Lincolnshire. Flat, flat, flat. Noel Coward got it wrong about Norfolk. Norfolk undulates. South Lincs is flat!"
1 year ago
Andy Bottomley Guest Editor replied saying "I'm guessing you live around Cambridge then - or am I too far south? I spent quite a bit of my youth on the North Norfolk coast where there is very little comfort drawn from the fact that when you stand on Sheringham beach the north wind you are feeling has been shipped in direct from the North Pole! Oh, those were the days when a man wore his goosebumps with pride!!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Living in the flatlands the wind is pretty much a feature here too! 'They' say, in the winter, it howls straight over here from Siberia. Nothing to stop its destructive path. Not to mention that ice cold blast! Give me rain every time."
1 year ago
Andy Bottomley Guest Editor replied saying "I agree with you - but living in a cottage as I do near another called Windy Ridge wind is a 'feature' round here - and not one taken into consideration when tourists book their hols having looked at a picture with clear blue skies and stunning views....silly billies!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Andy. 'This green and pleasant land, this England'. Gotta love the rain! The wind now, thats a different matter..."
1 year ago
Angela Doran said "Loved the story and the message behind it. We are such a dour nation - always moaning about the weather. Thanks Fran :)"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Yes we've nothing really much to complain about have we. Weatherwise at least! Thank you very much Angela. Best Wishes."
1 year ago
Lorna Fraser said "This is a lovely tale and says a lot in few words"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Lorna. I was so careful to keep it under 500, it skimmed in at under 300! Thanks and Best Wishes."
1 year ago
Jay Leffew said "Oh that that last bit could be as true as the rest of this story is so sadly true. I felt really sad for the cloud, when clouds generally are all only trying to help; they even make shapes for us to guess at, so they should always be appreciated and loved, it's the wind who needs to temper its behaviour more; - all those tornadoes and force twelves, I mean really! Nice one, good luck."
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Hi Jay. Yes, living in the flatlands I can agree with you about the wind. That 'lazy' wind that goes clean thru you! Suppose again though we in the UK mustn't grumble as as a general rule we dont get hurricanes and tornadoes. Still hate the wind though! Thank you very much for reading :-) Best Wishes."
1 year ago
Patsy R Liles said "Lovely story for chldren of all ages. And the moral of the story is stop complaining, things could be much worse. We ship milk in sterile containers, perhaps it would be possible to send water to the arid places of the world someday --- ah but never enough. Very nice. Patsy Liles"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Patsy. UKians really do seem to be obssessed about the weather but to be honest we really dont get any extremes, unlike other countries, US included. Thanks again. Best Wishes."
1 year ago
Linda Bond said "I love the fable feeling of your story Fran. Government ministers need to read it and be afraid!"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Linda. Government ministers need to read it and stop the leaks! (Perhaps in more ways then one...)"
1 year ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "Yes, Oh well done, how is it that in the midst of a drought the weather forecasters still say that the weather is good - when it's sunny and BAD if it rains. You have hit the nail well and truly on the head here. I was feeling quite sorry for your little guy and then you gave me a smile to finish with - Great - Diane"
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Diane. Must admit I'm looking forward to a little sunshine now though!"
1 year ago
Adam West Guest Editor said "Quite apt reading this moral tale immediately after finishing The Road - I liked it a lot by the way being a closet Green - many thanks and good luck, Adam."
1 year ago
Fran Strahan replied saying "Thank you very much Adam. Glad you enjoyed :-)"
1 year ago

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