Short Story: Pervert

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Narrated by
Posy Brewer


A single woman begins to have serious doubts about her friend.


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Linda found herself staring out of the window into the cold morning light. It was a ridiculous thing to do at her age - 30 years old today. Far too old to be looking out for the postman with a sense of growing excitement. After all, what could she expect to receive; a card from her mother, one from her brother - if he remembered, and possibly a few more from her friends, maybe even a present or two, but probably not. Nothing to get excited about. But she could never shake off this childish sense of anticipation for birthdays and Christmas which was inevitably followed by disappointment when the actual event arrived. Once the card was torn open or the present opened, even if it was something she really wanted or needed, it never lived up to her expectations.

Disappointment, she concluded, was the only dependable feature of adult life but even so, there she was, her breath on the…

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Ajiba Ajiba said "Cool end :D"
3 years ago
Jacfabel Lopez said "it is good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
3 years ago
Elizabeth Ferada said "it was a great story actually.. however the ending is not enough though.. i want more.. good job! you've done a good work because the story keeps me wondering and eager to know what David were up to... :)"
4 years ago
Anthony Wobbe said "Love the twisties. I sorta knew it was coming. Regardless it was well played and well written. Looking forward to more of your work."
4 years ago
Judy Mandelbaum said "Loved this! Great suspense, and I was expecting anything other than what she actually found in the end... Posey did a great job too. Congrats to you both."
4 years ago
Abby Nolan said "Hahahahaha!It was so suspenseful that u thought there would be something horrible in that bag,but it was just a little tag.lol so funny.I enjoyed the story very much so thank u for writing it."
4 years ago
Sandy Wardrope said "Brilliant Pete, Great dialogue and well described, you nailed women precisely, see my wife. Well done, keep it up. Yours SW"
5 years ago
Stan-collins Ubaka said "captivating story...sweet narrative...wonderful ending!"
5 years ago
Tania Islam said "Hahaha! I love it =D"
5 years ago
Oscar Ranzo said "great narrative, great style, fast, suspensful and a humdinger of a twist in the tale."
5 years ago
Denise Melville said "Loved this one. Well- written and I was totally sucked in!"
5 years ago
Dorothy Spruzen said "This story added a smile to my day! Very nice story and very good writing. Well done."
5 years ago
Moira Prentice said "Hi David, absolutely brilliant. I am actually stuck for words it was that good."
5 years ago
Carol Ford Guest Editor said "Liked it... made me laugh at the end.. thank you."
5 years ago
Ann Smith said "Lovely twist and so well written. It kept me guessing all the way through."
5 years ago
Valerie Ball said "An anticlimax? Yes, but such a relief! The build up was fantastic and my imagination was running riot with Linda's. A well crafted, humorous story and the touches of darkness made it quite compelling. Thanks Peter."
5 years ago
Lucinda Dopson said "I am new to "shortbread" weekly stories - but this was my favourite so far!"
5 years ago
Sheena Robertson said "Lovely. No words wasted. Great build up and neat twist. I can already hear it on the radio. Thank you."
5 years ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "I knew that I had read this before but had to refresh my memory and I'm so glad I did - Just as good on the second reading and I had actually forgotten that last line and so had the experience again - Thanks - Diane"
5 years ago
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Bill Kirton Guest Editor said "Beautifully balanced between the initial character sketch, the nature of the relationship, the inevitable weakening and the killer punch line. Respect, Peter."
5 years ago
Ingeborg Alde said "Very nicely done! What a true picture of the human mind. Reminds me of the Bluebeard stories. Thanks, Peter."
5 years ago
Patsy R Liles said "I did not like either of them. But I wasn't meant to. They were so human! What a stroke of genius this story was. Makes one think of the nasty things in one's own life. Good job. And the narrator was just the one for it. Thanks to all. Patsy R Liles"
6 years ago
Dickson Telfer said "Brilliant!"
6 years ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "I agree with all the complimentary comments on this story, it was very well constructed and skilfully written The situation and the dialogue were believable and convincing. However, on the actual story itself I'm afraid that she wouldn't be my friend any more and for very a close friend I would be concerned that she seemed very quickly to think badly of David. That is to take nothing whatever from the writing it made me think about relationships and how this one, although on the surface seemed close was actually riddled with doubts. David came out of it better showing a great sense of humour and I do think that he probably engineered the situation for a laugh. Still and all a promise is a promise."
6 years ago
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David Green said "Here is an example of why this rating system is almost useless.....an excellent story that is deserving a higher rating. The ending, which we might have guessed except we were so properly set up with the "political correctness thing" Well done. A fine listen!"
7 years ago
Christine Human said "Pervert - So difficult to write short, short stories. Perfect for audio.So well done"
8 years ago
Jacqueline Kirk said "Got Me! - Good one! Was just getting into it when the abrupt twist came! Well done!"
8 years ago
Sam Noble said "Different - Brilliant short story. Kept me gripped by the writing and the voice."
8 years ago
Jane Townsley said "brilliant story - Great story and the twist ending is so neat, I didn't see it coming. Probably because the other possibility was so disturbing! I think Linda's suspicions were legitimate. Weird thing for David to say, especially as there's a pervert in the area. I think David needs the therapy! Good story though. "
8 years ago
Kris Wallace Guest Editor said "Odd Friends - I listened to the audio and the narration was perfect for the piece. The story is enjoyable though a tad disturbing. Can't shake the idea that Linda needs a little therapy, or at least the idea that now she's opened herself up to the possibility of what she's capable of believing David COULD be, that she'll never see him in the same light again. Saying that, David's 'If you look in the bag you'll never want to speak to me again' comment was very misplaced for his intentions!"
8 years ago

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