Short Story: Magic In The Mountains

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Diane Dickson


No matter where you go and how often you travel this wonderful world can still hit you with a surprise.


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We once rode the tiny train from the little station at Kliene Sheidegg up to the summit of the Eiger. The old wood gleams in the brittle light and metal on the locks and catches twinkles in the unsullied sun. Tiny alpine flowers prick the grass and make one think of glamorous nuns, singing children and just how old exactly is Christopher Plummer now.

Breathless drops and soaring cliffs tease your eyes and heart as the little contraption climbs the heights until of a sudden you are plunged into the tunnel. There are windows in the sides of the mountain. Did you know that? you may well, I didn’t and I found it astounding.

Two stops on the way and then we emerged onto the peak. The Eiger, the Monch and the Jungfrau, a glorious trio reaching up touching heaven and we standing fog breathed and awestruck as a tiny climber traversed the snow field. His red clothing was blood on the…

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Dianne Ness said "Amazing...makes me want to pack it all in and head to Europe and all of its' historical wonders. I read this through the "Random" link. I didn't even check to see who wrote it first. I was delighted it was you--but can't say I was surprised--I am beginning to recognize your voice and I like it!"
2 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor replied saying "what a very kind and encouraging comment - thank you so very much, although the credit should really go to the mountains for giving me the inspiration I think - cheers - Diane"
2 months ago
Meg Malpass said "Beautiful. You really took me up that mountain and shared that wonder and surprise. My only criticism might be it is too short. Having never been up the Eiger I would love to hear more please."
4 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor replied saying "Thank you so much Meg. I have to say that it is an amazing place. I do hesitate to write true life travel stories as I would hate to bore readers but maybe I should give it some thought."
4 months ago
Heidi-jo Swain said "A truly magical journey..."
4 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor replied saying "Thank you so much I am very happy that you enjoyed this piece. - Diane"
4 months ago
Adam West said "Wonderful microcosm of sights and well...wonders - all done with a skilful hand, an intelligent eye - and there was humour too - now altogether folks: THE HILLS ARE ALIVE... very enjoyable short, Diane, many thanks, Adam"
4 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor replied saying "thank you very much sir, I am so glad that you enjoyed it."
4 months ago
Desmond Kelly said "Lovely. You are able to see the world in a grain of rice. Well done Diane, may the magic continue. Des"
4 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor replied saying "Hi Des, thank you yet again for reading and taking the time to comment. I really appreciate your thoughts on my work - Diane"
4 months ago
Jay Leffew said "Another gem, which you brought to life with such a sense of wonder it was almost like being there. Thank you."
4 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor replied saying "It was wonderful it really was but I think I drove the children mad going on about it afterwards - "Yeah Mum, Yeah butterflies we know - sheesh" that sort of thing. Thanks again for reading and commenting."
4 months ago

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