Short Story: Losing It

ShortbreadMichelle GonzalesShort Stories › Losing It

Please log in or join for free to download, rate and comment on this story. You can read online without being a member!

About this Short Story


Four friends, one night, one crazy adventure.


  • 2274 Words
  • 9 Comments
  • 96% Community Rating
  • 549 Views

Add to Bookshelf

Competitions & Prizes

This story has not yet been entered into any short story writing competitions.

This night started out like any other night. Who would have thought it would turn out to be a race against time to save my ass from getting thrown in jail? It’s almost midnight, it’s early May, and one can feel the chill in the air...but not if you’re running. Marie, one of my best friends is running, huffing and puffing along side me. We look at each other and start to laugh. And then I start to cough.

“Wait, I have to catch my breath,” I say, in between heavy breathing, coughing and laughing.

“C’mon we’re almost there. Just a few more blocks… I think.” Marie tries to encourage me. I look around quickly. We’re at Pitt Street Mall Parramatta, near the fountain; we just ran past Town Hall. A few more quick breaths and we are off again running as if our lives depend on it. Well it did… sort of.

****

It’s 6:30pm on Saturday and I’m getting ready…

  Read Short Story     Download Short Story


Please login or join for free to rate this story.


This story has yet to be reviewed!


Steven Mace said "This is a cool story, was great fun to read!"
2 weeks ago
Alice Murdoch said "AMAZING!!! loved that story sooo bad i liked the twist at the end about the emmm... joint being given back *****(five star ratin)"
4 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "I really enjoyed this. It was extremely well constructed with a really great ending - thanks - Diane"
4 months ago
Rebecca Yamalimbu said "This is funny. Great story."
5 months ago
Michelle Gonzales replied saying "Thanks Rebecca. I'm glad you enjoyed it."
5 months ago
Jay Leffew said "Certainly picked up speed like a train, and had me on tenter-hooks. The 'speech-bubbles' drifted off as the action put on squealing brakes, and then erupted in laughter. Not bad, not bad at all! - (Not that I approve you understand?)"
6 months ago
Michelle Gonzales replied saying "Thanks Jay. I appreciate your comment. I'm glad my story entertained you."
5 months ago
Adam West said "This read like a comic strip - action and dialogue - moving fast from scene to scene - so much so I could almost see the characters and the speech bubbles. Breathless stuff that had me holding my own breath by the end...many thanks, Adam"
6 months ago
Michelle Gonzales replied saying "Thanks Adam! I really appreciate the comments."
5 months ago

Read and Download Adult Short Stories

Read Losing It by Michelle Gonzales and other Adult short stories at Shortbread!
Also, write short stories, enter short story competitions and listen to audio short stories online for free!