Short Story: Little Mr. Peterson (part 3)

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Mark Patrick


The hostage - a continuation of the Little Mr. Peterson series.


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Ms. Zatorski stood up, placed the broken flashlight on the table, and picked up her baggy sweater. When she slipped the heavy rag on, her head appeared smaller, sandwiched between folds of cotton and dishevelled black hair. She looked at an upside down cage with an unconscious doll inside, facing up with his limbs splayed out. She kicked the container. “Wake up, pest.”

In a succession of casual kicks, she inched the cage to an open space under one of the shelves. Little Mr. Haubrich moaned, but did not wake from his groggy state.

Ms. Zatorski seized the fly swatter from the table and glided over to the right side of the room. She slapped the front of the first cage, on the bottom shelf. “Eeny…” Then swatted the one above it. “Meeny…” She pulled at her weapon, but the plastic end caught a moldy fork that locked the gate. She leaned in and a dozen strands of her ratty hair curled…

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Linda Cardoso said "Great concept! I like your descriptions. The dolls are very human. Mr. Peterson must seek revenge!"
1 year ago
Deanna Westwood Guest Editor said "Mark, I was really gutted that the story stopped where it did. It's a fantastic horror story concept and you managed to create distinct characters out of the dolls. I love the idea that people seek revenge on others but the dolls are actually real suffering beings. And then you know that there's a story behind each one of them. The descriptions are vivid as well, and so is the setting. Part of me wants them all to escape, and then another part of me is thinking that they were created to be punished for the actions of some pretty mean people. Wonderful idea, now don't leave us hanging anymore!"
1 year ago
Mark Patrick replied saying "Thanks Deanna! I actually did a lot of editing to Parts 1,2, & 3, which I will be re-submitting to Shortbread soon. I also just finished writing the first drafts of Parts 4, 5, & 6, but I don't think those will be up until January. Unfortunately, or fortunately, the story still has a long way to go. I think it is going to be a novella by the time it's done."
1 year ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "Mr Peterson is my hero"
2 years ago
Mark Patrick replied saying "Thanks Diane, I was hoping readers would feel that way"
2 years ago
Anita Kuechle said "I did find parts 2&3and; am anxiously waiting for Part 4. I sure hope he makes it out."
2 years ago
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Mark Patrick replied saying "Thanks Jon! I started out with a simple idea, but the more I mapped this story out in my head, the more complicated it became. Of course the complexities of a voodoo doll's world will make the story more fun as it progresses. Finishing a couple other stories now, so I will get back to this series shortly"
2 years ago

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