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Sheila O'hara


Flash Fiction about the moment in the life of two brothers where youngest brother is not as vulnerable as he seems.


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‘Jack’ by Sheila O’Hara

Jack is laughing. But then Jack never did understand what was going on around him. When we were all going into the woods, we met Jack coming out. When everyone played football Jack carried his baseball bat, looking for a game. Jack was slow, and stubborn. Jack was my brother.

Billy stopped kicking the boy on the ground, and turned around.

“So, Jack” said Billy, “what’s funny?”

“Me to know” said Jack, doing that heel-toe killer video jive he used all his waking hours.

“Stand still” said Billy, “I’m talking to you.”

But Jack wasn’t listening, he just bucked and weaved, bobbed and jiggled, then started crooning is some kind of off-tune song only he knew.

I stepped up to Billy, “Leave it.”

Billy’s pals starting laughing and mimicking “Leave it Billy,”

Billy ignored them ,“Why does he keep grinning all the time? He’s laughing at me.”

“Christ Billy, can’t you see the kid’s nuts?” said one of his pals.

Billy swiped his hand across the speaker’s…

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Sheila O'hara said "Hi Jay - many thanks for your comments, glad you liked it. One thing about writing Flash Fiction is that it helps me cut down on the waffle, so everything gets sharper (said she hopefully). Sheila"
8 months ago
Jay Leffew said "Chillingly well written; what a wake-up for his mum, later!"
8 months ago
Sheila O'hara said "Hi Diane - many thanks for your comments. I find flash fiction quite a challenge - but glad you think this works. Sheila"
8 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "The air of menace and danger in this is very well done, I could see the scene so clearly. I thought it was excellent writing and packed quite a punch for such a small piece - very well done indeed - Diane"
8 months ago

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