Short Story: In The Dead Of Night

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Steven Mace


A short piece of flash fiction. It is a brief vampire tale, heavily influenced by 'Nosferatu' and Bram Stoker's 'Dracula' (of course) It describes the terrible moment as the vampire prepares to strike at his innocent victim.


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The house was perfectly silent. Nothing stirred. The girl slept peacefully on the bed. Her only movement was the flutter of her eyelids as she dreamed. The covers of the bed slowly rose a centimetre or two and then fell, as she breathed. The white drapes at the window blew gently into the room with the night breeze, like pale spectral ghosts.

At that moment a shadow passed across the interior of the room, momentarily obstructing the white glimmer of the full moon.

The girl moaned softly in her sleep. Her drowsing face creased into a frown, before becoming impassive again. It was as if her subconscious momentarily detected a threat, before it was hidden again.

Scarlet eyes burned like lamps in the face of the dark intruder, as he silently flowed like a spreading pool of black ink into the bedroom. He was like a black storm cloud until his form slowly materialised…

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Adam West Guest Editor said "A wee bit cliched but nonetheless nicely done - many thanks, Adam."
1 year ago
Steven Mace replied saying "haha yes agreed, it is the classic and well-worn vampire setting briefly portrayed here."
1 year ago
Jay Leffew said "I love your descriptions, can almost feel the malodorous breath, shudder again, for a different reason..."
1 year ago
Steven Mace replied saying "It's very Nosferatu and Dracula influenced! Thank you for your praise!"
1 year ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "My goodness you have been busy. I haven't the time right now to read the longer pieces but these little nibbles of descriptive prose are like little petite fours, just one mouthful and then gone. Again I can see that this could go on to be a bigger story - thanks - Diane"
1 year ago
Steven Mace replied saying "Thank you Diane! I've submitted some selections here from my writing over the past decade. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it."
1 year ago

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