Short Story: Hingespring

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Dennis Hackin


In a World of Perfection perversely perverted by a pandemic plague an immoral unethical society Aftermath Law proclaims that the crippled children are to be placed on a train called More Further and sent to a medical facility on the otherside of the planet called Hingespring where they can be made perfect.


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"All Aboard!"

“All aboard!” the Conductor snorted.

The crippled children were herded aboard a magnetto train called MoreFurther. They were going to a medical facility called Hingespring on the other side of the planet and to be made perfect. The Mistress of Conductors, who the children called Mad Myrna, snorted and shouted and prodded the children and called them 'crips'. Her breath was foul, her body odour was odorous, her tongue was tart, disrespectful; she was disloyal and told lies and her heart was cold and stained. She believed in doom and gloom and told nightmares to the children. Oh, she was a horror of society perfection and she hated imperfections.

Rico, the Small Boy, sat next to Buddy, the Blind Girl, and did not speak for two days. And yet they spoke volumes as they mindmelted.

Rico had been made small by the Agent Orange defoliant that was sprayed on his family farm and killed his parents during the…

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Jay Leffew said "In an ideal world (which has strangely become identical to Perfect) there would be no nasty people. In fact without nastiness there would be little to fight against. In fact with nothing to fight against, all being well, we could drift into complete apathy, atrophe, and eventually fizzle out, with any luck...........So maybe a part of 'perfection' is to have imperfection in the form of mean Myrnas?............I'm glad the kids escaped."
1 year ago
Ravi Kaul said "A magical, fairy-tale like story. Reminded me of one of the scenes from The Golden Compass. The idea was interesting, of a society who sends disabled children away to be made 'perfect' - but if Mad Myrna is a product of this 'perfect' society then it raises questions about how this society ever came to be. Also, why do the children tell Myrna she could be good if she wanted to be? Does imperfection mean they are more inclined to 'be good' and perfection = 'bad'? Not a bad story, just raised a few questions as I read it. The end was interesting as well as it left it all open for a sequel..."
2 years ago
Dennis Hackin replied saying "muchas gracias"
2 years ago
Robin Pilcher Director said "Fruit Machine Selection: Spring - Wow, it looks like this might work! I hadn't read this before and I might never have done so. It's really a bit off the wall, like Philip Pullman meets Spike Milligan. It probably could be a bit tighter in the telling, but Dennis Hackin's humour is undoubted."
2 years ago
Dennis Hackin replied saying "write on"
2 years ago

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