Short Story: G.o.d Part Iv

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The Jackass woke up because she thought she had heard a sound. First opening only one eye without changing position, she opened the second one three seconds later and her vision was clear, aided by the spill from the lights along the paved walkways linking the cabins to each other and to the other areas of the hotel. She always slept with a gun in her hand, cocked but with the safety on. She now pretended to turn in her sleep and quickly pulled the hammer down as she dived off the bed and softly landed on her shoulder before coming up in a crouch in the space between the double bed and the wall.

From the corner of her eye she noticed her travelling bedside clock was talking about 4.30 am being the time. A quick calculation told her she had slept for almost six hours already. She stayed still for…

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Ponkious Boy said "Great story. Liking the direction the story is taking. I do wonder however, if you havent strectched the story quite a bit past the point of being believable when Jackass starts working her magic and phoning up contacts. The line about the CIA blaming an EOS agent (whatever that is) with ties to the Mossad for killing Trudy is not a very credible one I feel. Especially with the ties we all know both countries have. It sounds more like something Iranian or N.Korean officials would say. Also, the constant (almost-rascist) reference to Japanese-made cars as 'Japanese' makes the story sometimes difficult to follow if not cringe-worthy. Nonetheless, on to the next one!"
1 week ago
Ahmed-hamid Woody Bagala-alina replied saying "Thanks for stopping by again...i should have farther advised you to start with The Day Of The Jackass, my very first story posted on here, it will farther shed more light on the character of the Jackass, possibly justify all those contacts and maybe explain why some agencies would react a certain way where she is involved. As for the Japanese, no ill-intent on my part...we almost all grew up on them and Japanese cars account for probably three quarters of all automobiles in my country. As a nation, we know about Toyota and Nissan and Mitsubishi than GM or Ford or Chrysler! But sorry it came out cringey-ish! Thanks for your patience with my failings/weaknesses, Bless!"
4 days ago
Jay Leffew said "Apart from 'hang' which should've been '...she hung up...' I was grateful you only hit me with one 'f' word at the very end, and quite enjoyed the intrigue. You are a mite political though, and I'm not sure I could stomach so much of it it you weren't so good at developing a plot."
1 year ago
Ahmed-hamid Woody Bagala-alina replied saying "Thanks, Jay...its hard to live in my country and not be a `mite` political...yes even for someone like me who fancies himself as only interested in peace, love and tranquility. Bless!"
1 year ago

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