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Don Lister


Revenge is so sweet


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The people who live in the house next door to us once owned an ugly ginger tomcat.

Well, I have never liked cats; no one in my family has ever liked cats; in fact, we all absolutely and unequivocally detest and abhor cats - whatever their colour!

I was born in this house by the way; my brothers and sisters were all born here too. They left home when they grew older. They live in different houses now and I hardly ever see them anymore. I never knew my father either, mother said he was just a passing acquaintance of hers; she said she never saw him again after the night he made her pregnant.

Mother passed away a few months ago; she suffered horribly from some kind of stomach cancer and went right off her legs towards the end. My new dad buried her at the top of the garden when she died, and laid a row of pretty pebbles all round…

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Steven Mace said "Excellent story Don, at first I thought it was heading along in the same vein as Edgar Allan Poe's 'The Black Cat' but then came the twist at the end!"
3 weeks ago
Don Lister replied saying "Thanks Steve, it is nice to have feed back. I'm glad the ending caught you out a little, I too love tales with a twist."
3 weeks ago
Julian Fields said "Well done, Don. At first I wondered whether the narrator was himself a cat (it is perfectly possible to hate one's own species), but I guessed the truth fairly soon. As a cat lover, I must share Diane Dickson's disapproval. Well done."
6 months ago
Tommy Malcolm said "I suppose being a pet owner let me twig the narrator early, however, the story was extremely good and very well written. Congrats!"
1 year ago
Don Lister replied saying "Thank you Tommy, and good luck with your own writing."
1 year ago
David Green said "Well now, here you go writing a fairly ordinary story that dragged me alone to an unexceptional end, when out of the clear blue..."started licking the blood!" Best of all you gave us a hint: how all the children had left except the story teller, yet the father had soon disappeared - I noted that (apparent) inconsistency, but was 'willing to overlook it'. Well done!"
1 year ago
Don Lister replied saying "Thank you David. Yes, it was a problem keeping the narrator as vague as possible, but I'm glad it caught you out a little. Thanks a lot for the comment and good luck, Don."
1 year ago
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Don Lister replied saying "Thanks for that Jon, and I must say it gives one great encouragement to receive positive feedback from other writers. Best wishes, Don."
1 year ago
Patsy R Liles said "Ho well executed -- literally. Keeps one in suspense, suggests a young person at first, but then causes the reader to wonder....loved this one. Patsy"
1 year ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Had to check it out again, Don. Offensive? A cat fight? It was very astute -- I think cats have feelings, too. We know most animals can seek revenge, but cats are almost like elephants for memory and retribution. Reading as a reader is very satisfying, but one needs to take a second look because there are so many facets to a story they can easily be passed over as our impressions cause us to prejudge something well written. Look forward to your next offering. Best to you,Patsy"
1 year ago
Don Lister replied saying "Thanks for the post Patsy. Sorry I was so long replying (been on holiday). I'm glad you enjoyed the story, some people found it offensive, but you can't please 'em all! Kind regards, Don."
1 year ago
Adam West said "Very ingenious telling of a well-written story. You caught me out, I must say. Whilst I knew all was not 'right', I did not stop long enough to work out the twist, which I expected was coming, which is testimony to the your narrative as much as my powers of un-observation Ha-Ha."
1 year ago
Don Lister replied saying "Thank you Adam, I'm glad it caught you out. I purposefully made the narrative a little disjointed to try to do just that and I was wondering if it would work. Kind regards, Don."
1 year ago
Don Lister said "Hi Diane, Glad you liked the story in essence; I too like all animals, and this tale is just a muse on the animosity that exists between canines and their feline counterparts. I guess most readers would have an inkling as to the identity of the narrator as the story unfolds, but perhaps the twist catches a few by surprise. Thanks for the comment, and kind regards. Don."
1 year ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "I had a tiny inkling about half way in. Very clever. of course as a cat lover I must disapprove. Well constructed. - Diane"
1 year ago

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