Short Story: Climb Every Mountain

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Patsy R Liles


Seeking relief from grief, Jared has climbed the mountain his father once climbed. Only to find there was another one waiting at the bottom.


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I reached the top of Bald Mountain by noon that August day. The sign at the top said ‘Old Baldy Peak. Elevation 9,978 feet above Sea Level. 1,100 feet above Twin Lakes. Please do not leave debris behind. Enjoy the view and come again. U.S. Forest Service’.

I had climbed more than a thousand feet, but if I climbed into outer space, I would not find my father again. It was for him that I climbed one more mountain because he always cautioned me that there would always be one more to climb. This was only one of many.

I started peeling off some layers of clothing, at least heavy jacket and sweater, and stood looking over the vast expanse of wilderness. It was green as velvet with thick stands of conifers, some aspens and oak that would be beautiful with color in fall. There were streams from the melting snows, running into…

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Desmond Kelly said "Patsy, really well written story with great emotional content and tone. I understood the need to step in his dad's shoes, although not every son wants to do what their parents did. Anyway, I thought it worked well. The only doubt I had was the ending which I thought was a little bit too neat, but I'm a cynic. I'd have left it with the passing of the mustard. Des"
10 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Thanks Desmond. I wanted to badly to broaden out, but restricted to short as possible, I wrote and it seemed to need the ending to assure readers they did connect. Thanks for your comments. Value them very much. Patsy"
10 months ago
James McEwan said "Hi Patsy, I always smile at the names in America for mountains, Rocky, Bald etc. I can hardly read nevermind pronounce some of the names of the mountains in Scotland. I am glad it all worked out in the end for Jared, who incidently has brilliant eyesight looking down from the mountain top into the campsite. I think you managed bring out Jared's feelings well and although I was not prepared for the shift from the father to the girl, it all worked out in the end. Patsy, I was slightly confused on the time of the year, you tells us that the snow is melting, the view of the wilderness would be magnificent in the fall, but yet we have autumn fruits. What was the season in which the story was set?"
11 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Going over this again, I can see where the transition is too abrupt, James. But I had to edit out a great deal and it seemed to be there, going from his strenous effort to achieve and then recognizing he had, and time to move on. I'll try to watch for these in the future. Thanks so much. Patsy"
10 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Didn't take your remark as flippant, James. Glad you shared your thoughts. Sometimes we don't grasp the words in writing to make clear such moments. Brevity doesn't help. Trying to explain how he saw would have taken too many words. . . . and sometimes there is no explanation for our moments. . . epiphany, perhaps. ~Thanks again. Patsy"
11 months ago
James McEwan replied saying "Hi Patsy, I apologise for my flippant remark about eyesight. I should explain and make this clear. Jared managed to be able to see and describe the detail of his friends, arriving at the campsite, from his vantage point, but Tom required binoculars to find him. I wasn't entirely sure if it was possible for Jared to be clear with such a detailed description at the distance. However this does not detract my enjoyment on reading the story. Regards, James"
11 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "That shift was a sign of his closure with his father but wasn't as smooth a transition as I had hoped. As to the time of the year, those mountains are heavily coated year round because of height. Campgrounds are ready for use in June-July and this would have been vacation time, of course, so the story is in that time period, Up to Oct early Nov if the rains and snow hold off, he need not fear avalanches but must be more cautious mid summer as things heat up and the stuff really melts and is treacherous. Thanks for the comments. I value them very much. Patsy ---have to say I love Uk mountain names just for the ancient language and history that named them! James, what has eyesight to do with recognizing one's friend and a special girl? Don't we know them, no matter the circumstance? Again, see you, Patsy"
11 months ago
Winifred Marzella said "HI Patsy. Lovely story,enjoyed reading it."
11 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Thank you, Winifred. It was a pleasure to write."
11 months ago
Jay Leffew said "The word 'mania' should explain the term. All kids seem to dash about as though trying to cram impossible amounts of experience into their young lives, and I guess a twelve-year-old tries to cram forty years'-worth of experience into their short childhood perhaps? . . . . . Ah, just read Patsy's reply, I'm not far out then... . . . . . I like the time taken in this one. No hurry to 'find out', just take things as they come and deal with them as the need arises. Nice that his friends could make a 'match made in heaven'; so often these attempts end in failure, but all's well that ends well, and this is lovely, thanks."
11 months ago
Jay Leffew replied saying "Sad indeed, if only they could understand how valuable childhood is, but they won't take it from us oldies..."
11 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Glad you liked it Jay. In the past a 12 year old was still swinging on the old apple tree swing, swimming in the creek and etc. Now days they are sexually experienced, dress like fashion trees, and paint their nails with signs of the zodiac. No childhood with stories, puppies and kitties, and time with mom in the kitchen baking halloween cookies....sad. Best to you, Patsy"
11 months ago
Diane Dickson Guest Editor said "This story had a lovely tone to it, the little bit with the squirrel was especially moving I thought. I did stumble over "sister and I through the childhood mania to live forty years in twelve." and wasn't sure what you meant but it didn't matter there was so much more to enjoy here not least the ending which I will leave for readers to discover for themselves - thanks - Diane"
11 months ago
Patsy R Liles replied saying "Hi, Diane. Sorry for the stumble -- in past years it seems that society is so accelerated that children have no childhood. They are pushed into so many activities that I have wondered what they have left by the time they reach 15. My grandson now has a 1st degree black belt, at 12. Will strive for more degrees...and he always complains that he has no time to play, which is true. He is expected to behave as if he were forty...hope this explains what I have meant to pass on. Thanks, Patsy"
11 months ago

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