Short Story: Barnaby's Power

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Carolyn Young


A six year old's imagination holds no bars against his sisters sarcasm and a rainy day is  the  perfect time for  mischief.


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"Attention all units. I have the suspect in sight. On my command, fire with intergalactic energy blasts."

Six year old Barnaby stood tall, arms raised in a shoot-out stance, "I have THE POWER," the last couple of words were shouted for extra effect as he jumped down from the desk. He landed as quietly as an elephant on roller skates and flung himself onto duvets and pillows. He began to crawl across the floor commando style. A self made run-way had been dragged from his sisters' beds since the weather had made playing outside impossible.

The thunder rattled the old window frames and the rain slapped the window so hard, it sounded like nails from a hammer. Elfrida and Blossom had made a tent in the corner of the bedroom with an old fashioned wooden clothes airier and a blanket. The triangular space in the middle was big enough for both girls and they sat cuddled in beside each other. They had…

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Jeannette Ayton said "I like the story very much. The children's behaviour comes across as natural. I can imagine a young child enjoying listening to it and enjoying the fright of the storm. I loved the made up name, the 'super-duper electro-charged cosmogizer laser'. I have two questions though: a) Would the mother just accept that her daughters were happy without finishing checking, especially as window's have been broken. (This could be written as a reassurance without becoming an anti-climax, e.g. by peeping round the door before retreating. b) 'Dissonance' is a very complex word and out of keeping with the language of the rest of the story. would a young child understand it without an explanation interrupting the suspense?"
1 year ago
Carolyn Young replied saying "Hi, Thank you for your comment, I hadn't written that the mother had heard the glass breaking, just that she was checking because of the thunder, but I take your point that she could have still checked into the room. Thank you for your your help. Carolyn."
1 year ago
Alex Mcnee said "Wow! Reeeaaally good! I didn't know what to expect from the title! I feel sorry for the girls though!!! (mwhahahahahaha!)"
2 years ago
Jane Townsley said "great story. the characters are so real! thoroguhly enjoyed it."
2 years ago
Mark Patrick said "Where can I get a super-duper electro-charged cosmogizer laser? I really enjoyed the story, Carolyn. You captured the simple life and the fun of being a kid."
2 years ago

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