Comment: All Hallows’ Evening, 1975

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Jay Leffew said "See, - it's as if you have experienced these things personally, and just feel like sharing them, with no consequence or outcome to 'round them off'. As observations they are intriguing. If all the separate stories had been put together as one longer story you wouldn't've exceeded the word-limit, but there would still have been no resolution to the series of observations. They are interesting observations, but put like passing remarks. . . . . There needs to be intrigue, reason, drama:- '...I was horrified to find one of them Hanging so his toes barely touched the table beneath him...' - 'Why would anyone do such a thing!?' - 'The teacher? He must be mad!' - The conclusion could still be open ended, such as; - they tried to arrest him but he escaped and no-one knows where he is now, but some mysterious deaths start occurring, perhaps? . . . . . That's the drama; Reason? You have this running in the family? You needed to be one of the pack? You were initiated into it as an innocent? - Intrigue? Why was it happening? Disturbed spirits? Evil paranormal influence taking over? How to combat it? . . . . . The ingredients are there without being put together to make the stew, and your reader can't eat it until it's done..."
12 months ago
Martin Norberg replied saying "Thank you for reading and the comment."
12 months ago

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